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Growing up, Herrmann wasn’t born in a musical oriented family, however, he never let that discourage him from rising to the top prestige and following his pion in composing. He steadily created scores for huge hits like The Ghost and Mrs. Muir and For All That Money Can Buy and gained even more recognition. However, his biggest break came when he scored the prodigious science fiction film, The Day the Earth Stood Still. “It was an experimental score ahead of its time, in which he suggested electronic music without using electronic music.” The aftermath result, led him to compose two to three scores a year due to popular demand.